The song is alright.
If you want a better song, you need to pick 4 notes and build new patterns. The music lacks organized patterns.
Try beginning a mode, by removing all the conflicting notes. You start listening and then a 6th or a 3rd 7th knocks your ear down like Michael Jordan on a fat kid.
Keep all the great sounds, but restructure the music. If you want that "true" pop dance song, remove one note out of a 16 note redrum kid.
Radio stations are all named something different, but in Tulsa, OK (106.9 K-Hits) is a corporate party music station. EVERY song of ALL POP HITS is a short tempo timing to give you that "instant" need sensation in your songs.
My band is Rankine Star, you can check out my songs here: