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Old 2009-09-22, 22:22
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My New Post Punk Indie Pop Nightmare

Dear Gang,

Here's a little something I've been working on. It's 100% Record/Reason.

It's the first track called And_Or.

http://www.indabamusic.com/people/898490321

Tear it apart please!

thanks

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Old 2009-09-23, 01:01
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Well I am a fan of punk, but this one...not so much. I thought the rhythm was kinda cool, but the synth sound was a bit cheesy. The drumming also left some to be desired...for some reason I kept imagining Egon Spengler from ghostbusters singing this...not sure why...lol.
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Old 2009-09-23, 01:36
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Tear, tear , rip, rip - take that tune! lol

Not bad really. I'm not into the synth that your using. It kinda gets a little grating after awhile.


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Old 2009-09-23, 01:59
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Tear, tear , rip, rip - take that tune! lol

Not bad really. I'm not into the synth that your using. It kinda gets a little grating after awhile.


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What would make it less grating, a different sound, more variations?
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Old 2009-09-23, 02:22
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For sure - you could try some filters on it or even some modulation to give it more breadth. Of course, you could choose a different voice altogether, but you might be fond of this one. I would also consider changing it up - you know, find a complimentary sound that you can switch to at given intervals. Just experiment and see what you get!

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Old 2009-09-23, 16:00
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I think there's some good ideas going on here-especially the vocal arrangements near the end. i think that overall the production shows off some decent skills in that department. I think you could work on mixing the vocals so that they sound a bit more integrated into the tune. You could improve the beats to, as somebody already noted. the biggest problem here though is from a songwriting perspective. You tend to use alot of cliche lines in your writing....there's nothing about the words that make me emphasize with the character in the song.
 

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