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Old 2013-01-24, 06:52
lildude1989 lildude1989 is offline
 
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Feedback: My First Song. Ever.

It is a club song, with light dubstep, and is the first one I have ever fully tried working on, down to the mastering. Have yet to try it in my car, but I could definitely use some feedback.

https://soundcloud.com/lildude1989/stupid-little-bitch

The title comes from the lyrics.... but I do not have a pop filter yet, so I am not gonna bother putting them in right now.

I do not mind getting beaten up a little, so don't worry about being nice.... as long as you don't bluntly say it sucks, it is my first "motivated" song.

Thanks for the feedback.
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Old 2013-01-24, 10:30
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Hi

I will start by saying that if you pop up a song minus the lyrics its a bit like putting up a car with no engine. A rough demo is better than a half song every time.

That said it doesn't immediately come across like vocals are missing so...

I quite like the sounds. I wouldn't know DubStep from Prodigy so no genre critique but what I will say is that the sounds and style almost sound like they could have come from John Foxx. But he was super influential on early synthesists and dance artists so that is cool.

Mixwise it is a bit rolled off top and bottom. It lacks "crispness". I'd say it was in-part a monitoring issue. Learn your speakers no matter how average they are. That said the Hats that come in seem to sit just outside the mix. That could be a great idea or annoying, not sure which without the vocal.

It doesn't suck at all and is probably better than my earliest offerings back in the late 80's so well done and stick with it.

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Old 2013-01-24, 14:43
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Haha, thanks, I will see what I can do to fix the mix aspect, I actually judge a song by running it out to my car, so i will have to do that to find all the real bugs aka the mix problems.

I will post it up when its fixed.
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Old 2013-01-26, 20:14
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It certainly has potential. Stick with it. I found the synth stuff, electric guitar stuff, etc. (whatever the sounds are called, I don't know exactly) in it enjoyable.

However, it does need vocals, and I would also suggest either removing the hihats or finding a more gentle hihat to replace it.

Looking forward to the final version.
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Old 2013-01-26, 21:52
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I would put a bigger kick for the standard bassdrum. Being a clubone there needs to be much more power in that kick in my ears
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Old 2013-01-26, 23:20
lildude1989 lildude1989 is offline
 
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lol trust me, the version I have now is much better. Yet lacks the crispness. any suggestions on making the synth more.... crispy?

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Also, The bass drum sounds weak. Thats the way I keep it for one reason. I checked it in the car, and once I up the maximizer by a few decibels, the whole thing will be normal. If I up the bass now, it will piss off my subs later.

last but not least, The vox for the song start at bar 49, or the drop. However, they will be noticeable throughout the beginning, well, the title will be, anyway...

"Stupid Little Bitch, Bitch go fuck yourself
Catch an STD, but don't share the wealth
If you cheat on me again, I will send you to hell."

Right at the end of the song I am gonna have it end with " Stupid Little Bitch, I will See you in hell"


Last edited by lildude1989; 2013-01-26 at 23:38. Reason: Adding response.
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Old 2013-01-27, 06:57
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- Punchier Kick, and raise the volume of it.
- Same with volume of snare.
- Pay attention to your ears and volumes.
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Old 2013-01-28, 05:09
lildude1989 lildude1989 is offline
 
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Try listening to it now, just uploaded the latest.
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Old 2013-01-29, 03:41
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don´t know exactly what you ment concerning the maximiser. Do you say maximising the kick only or the whole song? Anyway, not only talking about volume but punch. Couldn´t find any real difference in the new version. Just my feelings.
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Old 2013-01-29, 04:22
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Your music is nice timely in the title itself
 

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